There is too much info to put into two "correct" paragraphs. The first paragraph could consist of everything down through the "punctuality" sentence. The second paragraph could contain everything about business through the sentence right above the food. The third paragraph would be the two sentences about the food, and the fourth paragraph would be the rest. If you are to have only two paragraphs, you need to weed out some of the info.
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